A poem by Saadia Asad
Falling out of love ……
I am the dizziness of a drunkard,
Fearless soar of a free flight……..
I am falling out of love !
The air that breathes upon me..
The dew that trickles down nature
Hold a rainbow solely for me.
Moonlit rays walking over deep waters,
Sunlit shafts piercing through my heart
Glorify it all like nothing else.
Free free free of invisible chains,
Chains of great expectations, small aims
High promises and low fulfillments.
Done away with woos and woes
Unbound of pretty, but petty enchantments
No more a slave of wild beatings of heart !
I am the gush of an azul, fresh , foaming wave
Fun filled squeal of an innocent laughter.
It all is nada but the fathomless freedom
Of falling out of frolics of fickle love !!!
Saadia Asad 07/07/2012
I requested Sophia Chawala to write a Critique on ‘Falling Out of Love’. .
Fayyaz
Critique by Sophia Chawala.
The very first thing that popped out at me when looking at this peom was the richness in imagery, metaphors and play on words. She executed wonderfully the emotions felt in and out of love by using nature refrences, which I think is an excellent choice of imagery, for love is just as uncontrollable as the occurances of nature. To me I think when it comes to love, there are 2 types: the appreciative type and the passionate type. This poem seems to be tackling the latter. Our senses are put on like a car geared to neutral, rolling freely down the hill without the gas pedal (logic). But just because passionate love is illogical, it doesn’t mean that it should be avoided all together. If seen with the right perspective and measured against bigger things at hand, passionate love can be okay. It just needs lots of control and one cannot fall into love unless he has a good knowledge and perspective on the dynamics of human relationships.
Thanks Ms.Chawla for your appreciative commentary on my poem.
Comments by Mirza Ashraf:
This is the way to comment and reflect. Here the talent of the poet and the critic speaks through their intellectual capability.
Mirza